No Last Name – SHORT STORY


     CINDERELLA DIDN’T CARE for princes, or for walking in glass. All she really wanted was a happy home life. Maybe it was the jealousy, the evil where there should have been love, perhaps she was just sick of cleaning. No fairy godmother saved her from that.
So yeah, she got herself a permit. Left the floors, the dust, the chores – they were never finished that day. Cooking never had been her thing. Washing clothes was fine, but she wasn’t going to clean anything that wasn’t hers ever again.
People say, killing your family, is truly psychotic, like it’s somehow worse than breezing through a stranger, a bank teller, or an officer of the law.
They don’t see beyond the surface. And Cinderella was sick of seeing everything beyond it, never acting on it, being a good girl and pleasing everyone.
Sure she’s certifiably nuts, locked up in maximum security, no stranger to solitary, but she had her reasons. And those bitches were what made her crazy.

During the more florid hallucinations she still believed a man would come to her with a shoe only she could fit into – a size six, like half the female population weren’t the same size. There was talk of a pumpkin carriage, some major significance about midnight.
Truth be told much of the tapes on file are garbled, but every now and then, I watch them, her big neotenous blue eyes staring, blonde hair scraped back, the blue dress deflated and stained. And there’s a story there, it’s undeniable. Somewhere between the bloodshot edges and pupils of her eyes, she wrote a book which she reads only to herself.
We never did find the bodies. And that house was so well cleaned there wasn’t a trace of incriminating evidence. A fascinating case, a devastating example of what destructive households could lead to. Maybe she could still apply for parole in 2026. But only if she gave up the burial sites.


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54 thoughts on “No Last Name – SHORT STORY

  1. Ooh..finally a story that tells the truth. Cindy stops being a goody two-shoes, and gives them what they deserve. 😄😄

    1. How appropriate mrs. Grimm read this 🙂 Thanks for commenting.

    1. And thank you for a short but great response 🙂

      1. “you say it best when you say nothing at all”- boyzone 🙂

    1. I’m mega pleased, thank you WickedGabe.

  2. Brilliantly twisted! The live action film should have been like this 😮

    1. I haven’t seen it, didn’t realise I jacked a title lol (so unoriginal…lol) Thank you so much for commenting.

      1. Oh I meant the recent live action Cinderella film actually 🙂 I was kind of hoping they would do a Maleficent-ish thing with it, and what you wrote here would’ve been a mind-blowing idea 😉

      2. Thanks, and yeah a dark Grimm tale is well overdue.

  3. That was really a genius take on a popular fairy tale. *applause*

    1. Thanks, I bow before the clapping ☺

  4. I love this! I hate I missed it when it posted. Cindy went psycho!

    1. Thanks Jenn, turns out that Walt fella was a lying sack of something 😃

  5. Brilliant reimagining. Love the description in the second last para – doll-like and psychotic – and the idea of a story existing between the ‘bloodshot edges and pupils of her eyes’, beautiful in an f’ed up way like a Lynch movie, plus I learned a new word: neotenous. Thanks for that.

    1. Many thanks unauthored.
      And neotenous is one of those random words I picked up but love using.

  6. At least all that slavery for her step mother came in handy in the end. High five Cinder.

    1. Yeah true, but look where she ended up 😐 lol

  7. LOL Loved the finale. Great twist one one of my favorite heroines.

  8. I had to read this first because I saw monkey was a fan. And I thought I had followed you along time ago, but today I sorted my notification and stuff, and just now saw I hadn’t, soz, but am now.

    I noticed going in the glass reference and t had the obvious but another for me, which I thought was clever given her shitty life…’walking in glass, nice analogy.

    I enjoyed it, though you should not be messing with out heads, I had enough with Disney lol

    Good stuff.

    1. More head messing lies ahead ☺
      Thanking you once again for your in depth feedback.

  9. Now this is how the faerie stories were meant to be. Brothers Grimm would be proud. I know I am. Thank you for sharing this wonderfully dark story.

    1. Many thanks phoebe, I may have a few more in the pipeline.

  10. Oh wow! This may be one of my favorite twists on the Cinderella fairy tale. Absolutely love Cinderella as a psychotic killer.

    1. Thanks Jade.
      She’s the one most likely to do something that I could think of. I’ve already covered Snow White…who next?!hmmm…

  11. Wonderful bit of writing, sir. Love the pace & how the twist was pretty much out there early doors, leaving the rest of the story to focus on the psychosis and grim (Grimm?) details.

    1. Haha Grimm details indeed.
      Thanking you for your feedback babbit.

  12. What a twist to the most adored fairy tale!
    If Cinderella had been projected that way, it would have been a great thriller! 😉

    1. Maybe some twisted remake could be made? Something tells me Disney might object…but then I think its a Grimm fairytale, so maybe it wouldnt be so tough to do.

      1. Well, I believe the original does have a plot where Cinderella did kill her step mother. Then comes her second step mom, something like that! 😮😌

  13. Great subversion of the fairy tale, Lion

    1. Cheers Chris.
      Theres something about them that asks to be turned into something else and the pop culture aspect helps make that process easier.

  14. I’m glad I came here and took a look! Nice one.

  15. Brilliant. Reminds me of this song

    1. Thanks.
      And great linkage, a fitting song ☺

    1. Thanks for the suggestion, bookmarked ☺

  16. Good twist on an old story. Love the neotenous blue eyes – had to look that one up to be sure I had it right 🙂 Kept hearing Humphrey Bogart or Joe Friday narrating this one!

    1. Thanks gina ☺
      Neotenous is one of those words i heard in a lecture and it stuck with me, describes perfectly what it means.

  17. VictoryInTrouble June 29, 2016 — 2:12 AM

    Wow!! Twisted for sure! 😄

      1. VictoryInTrouble June 29, 2016 — 4:20 AM

        Oh, I’m a VIP! 😛 😀
        You’re welcome. 🙂

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